First Draft:
This is my first draft of my film trailer, I have identified several things which I need to change in the trailer because of the feedback i have received from other pupils and teachers.
I need to reduce the time of the trailer because the trailer has to be 120 seconds long but this trailer is over 2 minutes so I will make sure that the next draft for the trailer is under 2 minutes long. Some of the feedback I got was that the trailer didn't make any sense as it didn't explain the plot, so i will have to adjust the shots, sound and camera edits used so their is a story within the trailer.
The film institution at the start of the trailer also needs to be reduced because it is over 15 seconds which I feel is unnecessary to have, and the full institution is usually shown at the start of a film, not a trailer so I will reduce the time to about 2-3 seconds long. Their is also a grammar error when a graphic caption is 42 seconds in, it says "Afterwards these footages were found..." it should say "Afterwards the footage was found.." I will make sure I correct this error in my second draft.
I need to reduce the time of the trailer because the trailer has to be 120 seconds long but this trailer is over 2 minutes so I will make sure that the next draft for the trailer is under 2 minutes long. Some of the feedback I got was that the trailer didn't make any sense as it didn't explain the plot, so i will have to adjust the shots, sound and camera edits used so their is a story within the trailer.
The film institution at the start of the trailer also needs to be reduced because it is over 15 seconds which I feel is unnecessary to have, and the full institution is usually shown at the start of a film, not a trailer so I will reduce the time to about 2-3 seconds long. Their is also a grammar error when a graphic caption is 42 seconds in, it says "Afterwards these footages were found..." it should say "Afterwards the footage was found.." I will make sure I correct this error in my second draft.
Second Draft:
Here is my second draft of my film trailer, I have critically evaluated the good and the bad aspects of this trailer so in my next and final draft I will have all the corrections done.
Firstly, their is a spelling error at when a graphic caption appears it says "3 studen went on a field trip", it should say "2 students went to film a documentary on the myth known as the masked man", this is because we decided that we only have two students going to film and the other student should play the masked man.
Their is another grammar mistake on the second graphic caption, because it says "Several day later they were reported missing", it should say "Several days later they were reported missing".
I also need to improve the diegetic sound coming from the actors because people will struggle to try and listen to what the character are saying. For example, when Kevin says "Why are we here",my response is very quiet and if the audience can't hear me in the trailer then they won;t understand the story. To resolve this issue I will record the voices and edit them in the trailer and use them as a narration instead to explain the story.
Third Draft:
Here is my 3rd draft of my film trailer, I have evaluated this draft so I know what errors my group have made so we can fix the errors when we do are next draft.
I have made a grammer mistake when it say's "Several day later they were reported missing", I will fix this error by writing "Several days later they were reported missing". Also we may have to change the soundtrack from the 28 days later to the SAW soundtrack because we were told from are feedback that the soundtrack didn't fit into the trailer we decided to use the SAW soundtrack as this is a horror film.
I also have to change the film institution at the start of the trailer because the Lionsgate has been used but the billing block in the trailer say's distributed by Warner Bros so I will insert the Warner Bros institution with the Lionsgate institution.
Here is my 3rd draft of my film trailer, I have evaluated this draft so I know what errors my group have made so we can fix the errors when we do are next draft.
I have made a grammer mistake when it say's "Several day later they were reported missing", I will fix this error by writing "Several days later they were reported missing". Also we may have to change the soundtrack from the 28 days later to the SAW soundtrack because we were told from are feedback that the soundtrack didn't fit into the trailer we decided to use the SAW soundtrack as this is a horror film.
I also have to change the film institution at the start of the trailer because the Lionsgate has been used but the billing block in the trailer say's distributed by Warner Bros so I will insert the Warner Bros institution with the Lionsgate institution.
Fouth & Final Draft:
Here is my final draft of my film trailer, my group have made a lot of changes as when we received feedback off my teachers we realised that we made a lot of mistakes.
We felt we had to change the non-diegetic sound as we felt it didn't fit into to the trailer so we decided to change it to the SAW soundtrack which is a horror franchise. We also decided to add sound effects as we felt it would build suspense.
We corrected the grammar and spelling mistakes and we fixed the camera shot of when the camera drops because on the last draft when the camera drops the same shot is repeated which makes it look like the camera is levitating.
Overall I feel that my group have filmed a really good trailer as we have used a variety of different shots,edits and sounds.
We changed the music because edit did not fit with the trailer, we added sound effects to add suspense, we had feedback from people on youtube and Facebook and edited it towards it, this is our final product

